Thursday, March 20, 2008

TORN APART


Togetherness was a bliss,
Moving apart is pain.
You gotta realise the difference, else
The essence of your relation is all in vain.

The moment you realise this difference,
You are together again.
If you don't,
You'll end up calculating not the loss,
But what you have gained.

Forgotten are all the moments and promises,
Voracity and warmth also diminishes.
Time, no doubt, cures it all.
Thus there always remain an insurmountable wall.

Getting back to reality after the fall,
Ain't no easy task,
It calls forth great effort afterall.
And with a facial mask life goes on.

19 comments:

Mez said...

Nicely written..felt it!

Thanks for dropping by my blog!

Anonymous said...

hey... thanks for the comment on my blog.. :)

and as for this write-up... really liked it...

cya around!

Urban Caveman said...

must be some kinda cosmic co-incidence or something....i just had a break off last week, exactly one week ago, in fact, and could relate to all of that.

you've got a beautiful talent. dont ever stop writing.

DomeRinger said...

Hey Smriti, thanks for commenting on my work. Its great to know you liked it. hehe, waise, I see you have been doing some blog reading(from the last 3 comments here).
Waise the idea of the poem is really good. How about ending it with, 'Life goes on, under a fake mask'??
You write well, just try to maintain the rhythm a bit more.

The Muse said...

Good one ,Reene:)

Sutta said...

Its all RELATIVE! :|

d SINNER!!! said...

good one...sad one... but it happens...

Anonymous said...

loved ds one ... specially opening lines ... :D

Mystique Wanderer said...

decent writing...liked the thoughts...shud write more...

Anukriti Bishen said...

short n sweet

Anukriti Bishen said...

heart rending...

MAN IN PAINTING said...

that was very good.straight from the heart.Don't ever stop writing.Copy my words YOU ARE GOING TO STAY HERE FOR A LONG LONG TIME.Best wishes.
Please comment on my experiments on surrealism and Magical realism and comment as you like....

Ruchi said...

all my appreciation for u..
n for the great mind behind dese thots..:)

nikunj said...

Very well written. The most subtle things are expressed evrys simply.
I believe the ending can be improved.

Usha Pisharody said...

Simple, yet profound with a heartfelt expression that makes one connect instantly to it!

You write really well!

Anonymous said...

Nicely penned.

Anonymous said...

Nicely penned.

shankey said...

hey nice lil poem der...
enjoyed readin!!!!

Abhra said...

Amazing poem, nothing is more beautiful than the truth dear...hat's off to you,I would say the best poem I have ever read in a blog.